ok so i recently just made a poem because i love this girl and shes practically driving me crazy now i made this on my own and i want to know if there's like another poem just like this anyways here's how it goes:
I can't express the way i feel
I can't describe them when your here
i can't stop thinking about you
and i always wanted to say I LOVE YOU
three little words so easy to say
three little words so easy to pronounce
yet when you're here all i can say is
hey how are you...
each day i see you ,i want to
hug you,kiss your forehead and say i love you
you light up my day when i'm down
and you make me smile when i frown
the sad part about this is
i don't have the courage to tell you how i feel
each time i try to tell you how i feel
i fail and i miss my chance to heal
and with this burdened void in my heart
getting larger and largejust because love poemr since the start
i can only wish one day i get the courage
to tell you how i feel and just say....
I LOVE YOU
again i would like to point
out i'm new to this poetry stuff
and i'm only a freshman in high school
if you guys can help make the poem a little better
i still don't know what kinda format this is suppose
to be so if you can help figure that out as well i would appreciate it
oh and the thing about the part wer it says "i miss my chance to heal" it means like heal myself from this burden i carry to tell you how i feel
Keep writing poems. It will help you understand your own feelings and rehearsing word in your mind will make you ready for the day when you can say those words I LOVE YOU and really mean them.
its kinda original but its cute :)
u don't need to edit one bit. u got everything in rite area. it all great and cute.
It makejust because love poems sense and I like it
Welcome to poetry. You're not to bad. Girls like guys who write poetry. I do and I'm a woman. I would like this poem. I think it's very sweet. Why don't you read some published poetry to get the feel of how poetry is supposed to be written. I would say go for it. You do have talent now hone it.
You think you're good,
But that's not true,
You try to hide the freakin truth,
You're just pathetic,
You're not so good,
But still you're decent,
Cheers mate, cool.
WOOOOWITS REALLY GOOD
I REALLY REALLY LIKE IT
UR TALENTED BOI
NO SERIOUSLY.......
ITS GREAT AND VERY KEWT AND
I CANT XPLAIN BUT WELL DONE
the poem is really good, especially when your new to writing some...
you should really continue writing poems..
your really good at doing it.
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